i heard you lost
yr virginity
while i was
cleaning up
the mixed nuts
that one of us
knocked
to the floor
with skins
of almonds &
macadamia nut
clippings overflowing
out of my hands
i threw them away
next to yr used
condom &
only 2 or 3 times
have i been happier
yr virginity
while i was
cleaning up
the mixed nuts
that one of us
knocked
to the floor
with skins
of almonds &
macadamia nut
clippings overflowing
out of my hands
i threw them away
next to yr used
condom &
only 2 or 3 times
have i been happier
I adore this one, love the imagery of the spilled nuts on the floor, and the skins and clippings spilling from your hands... I like the idea of "losing your nuts" while someone else is losing their virginity, or else, picking back up nuts... I like the way nuts can stand in for sanity, anyway. Love the last line off by itself, and the slight confusion of 2 or 3 times (they amount of sex, the people fucking?... oh, haha, I get it.)
ReplyDeleteThis is a great one... but I gotta ask... what's with the "yr"? Goin for an e e cummings kinda signature style?