Monday, September 26, 2011

If Nothing Else

With the first cigarette of the day
comes my cheeriest disposition.

That is before the aches of daylight
settle into my spotted skin.

And with my last comes the saddest,
now that another day has passed.

But to all I meet and all I pass,
I give a smile if nothing else.

Posted by kaleb (worst) at Monday, September 26, 2011

2 comments:

  1. NicoleOctober 5, 2011 at 11:45 PM

    Short but sweet. I really like this one. "aches of daylight" is wonderful, "comes the saddest, passed" is a good slant rhyme, and I really dig that only the third stanza has any sort of rhyme... makes it the most important stanza, which it is, to me. The end, so the most important. But the last stanza, as an afterthought, just to make sure we're not left heartbroken by the turning of the page.

    - Nicole

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  2. kaleb (worst)October 6, 2011 at 3:35 PM

    Well observed, thanks for your thoughtful comment.

    Sometimes I just don't like ending it where it ends.

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