i lasted out
the night on
peaches & pears,
swearing i'd
never again
try
to see the all
of you
now
i'm fruit light
dressed
for a burial,
meeting
sunrise out on
the primal
pastures
considering
the heart,
no one is truly mad;
that we all
just
want something,
&
some
of us get
tangled
in the wires)
I adore the last stanza of this... what a poignant notion, truly. I especially like your use of the and symbol in the poem, I think with the shortened lines of each stanza it works really well, visually. The second stanza confused me a little, but the imagery of sunset out on the primal pastures was great, I think I just got lost in the fruit light dressed for a burial meeting. It's got great rhythm though, the whole poem does actually. I think there's a level of power in "swearing i'd never again try to see the all of you", a hint at something dark from the past, and I really like it. This is a great poem!
ReplyDeleteThis is a silly poem. It makes me giggle. Does the fruit symbolize fertility? Or a chance meetup of two young lovers? ;)
ReplyDeleteDIDN'T THIS GET VOTED OUT OF GANGSTERS???????
ReplyDeleteTWICE?
Anon, I've only submitted it once. I failed to attend the meeting. I got an email saying that it's been accepted... if you know something else let me know.
ReplyDeletefruit is just good.
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